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feel like an explorer, emerging from my shell to raise cautious antenna. People
are scary, so many of them. I ooze around the corner, halting, hesitant, then
slide across these crowded sidewalks, wishing my soft body would sprout wings
and fly like the beautiful women I see flitting from the Korean’s shop to the
Chinese food place. Cut flowers on the sidewalk. Where I come from they grow
wild in the fields.
Beautiful. Keep writing!!
ReplyDeleteI like the stronger verbs you used to express movement. Some of them engage more than one sense at once and that's always good when it comes to writing. I like the point of view and the links to nature in general. I really enjoyed reading this and I hope to see more from you. Your soul is creative in general so I imagine that you'll be successful with anything creative and therefore you have the potential to write beautifully. Exercise this, I can't wait to see more!
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